Monday, July 9, 2012

The Gentle Rain - written by Heaven

Over the weekend, Heaven emailed me and asked if she could use our story, more specifically, my Boundary Agreement as material for her writing.  I admit, I was a bit nervous about how our marriage would be represented but in my heart I knew Heaven understood how much love and respect I hold for my husband and I trusted she would allow that to shine through in her words.


Below is the poem Heaven wrote and I was blown away by how well she captured the emotions in my marriage.  From the moment I first fell in love with Devin, to the moment he broke my heart with his addiction and now to the boundaries that are in place along with the hope and love that continue to flourish even on the toughest of days.  


Heaven is truly a talented writer and continually inspires me with her work.  Her blog is one about love and intimacy and pure artwork, as you'll read:



The Gentle Rain

the rain came this morning
like gentle kiss on a fevered brow
drenching the balcony window 
in dusky light and muted blue 

all through the week, summer heat
from your eyes blistered and cracked my skin,
like a forest fire raging out of control,
wounded bull running down Santo Domingo street
i remembered how sweet your first kiss was,
how soft your hands cupping my cheeks, 
until your addiction for sun blurred the lines,
black tarred the flesh craving for flesh,
flushing down our intimacy into dirty urine stall
  
i held your face, my evening star,    
with a bold marker, i penned the words:
black and white letters,  
crossing all t's, dotting all i's,
drawing height and weight of consequences,
fencing the boundaries to protect me and you. 
pinned atop our heads, we slept spooning the moon
the rain came this morning
like gentle kiss on a fevered brow
drenching the balcony window 
in dusky light and muted blue
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Thank you Heaven, for writing such a beautiful piece and for treating us and this tough topic with such respect.  It is deeply appreciated.

51 comments:

  1. This is a difficult topic to write a poem about even when it is directly about your own experience. And she's taken your experience that I've read so much about and written a verse that sounds so like your soul.

    In it's component parts the piece is moving, taken as a whole the piece is stunning. I hope that this is something that you have been able to share with Devin. It's that line "we slept spooning the moon" that he might find touching, moving and loving.

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    1. I agree, Anne, she did such a fantastic job taking a topic that she has never experienced first hand and making it her own. It's amazing! Her writing skills are astounding.

      I thought about sharing this Devin but haven't been able to just yet...maybe after my trip to NY...

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    2. And it's T-minus 5 to Elsie's holiday. Woooohoooo!!

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    3. I know - I'm so excited!! I just got off the phone with my friend from up there =)))

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    4. it is stunning. I read it a couple times letting it sink in. That is how we feel isn't it? Elsie you know you've been inspiring to me in more ways than one. I'll be using your ba for boundaries week too, if you'll let me.

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    5. I almost missed this comment, April =)

      Yes, she captured our emotions from the begin of the relationship, to the turmoil in the midst of the disclosure to now, the rebuilding. I'm flattered that I've been inspiring you . You're doing such a great job on you're blog! It's very inspiring..

      Feel free to use my BA....

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  2. That is rather quite beautiful. I think she did a wonderful job of capturing everything, despite not really being a part of it. It speaks volumes about how both of you write really, not just her.

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    1. Thank you, Mark! She is such a talented poet. The way she can take any topic given to her on any day and make it her own....that takes a true gift!

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  3. I think I love this just like you do Elsie, it's an absolutely beautiful piece of writing even though it's not something that I can relate to at all, I don't think I'd ever heard about Heaven until now but I'm seriously going to have to become a follower because this poem is an astounding piece of writing, no wonder you love it so much.

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    1. I'm glad you enjoyed it too, Matthew. Heaven finds a way to bring the reader in to her writings. I hope you enjoyed her blog, I know I always do...I always leave there feeling better - it's just how she writes.

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  4. Lovely poem Elsie. That is pretty sweet of her to dedicate a poem from your experience. And she did an amazing job with that.
    Your blog is awesome Elsie, day by day it is improving and exceling and is like potpourri of life and your writing and honest inspiring stories touches readers and forms this bond, which is lovely and a very very difficult thing to do, we dont even know your face yet we feel so connected to you, how awesome is that?

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    1. It was so sweet of her to think of me when she was given the topic of boundary. I agree, she did such a fantastic job, she is such an outstanding writer!

      You're making me blush, MaMTC! I'm not going to be able to fit my head through the doorway if you keep saying all these nice things about me...keep 'em coming....just kidding! Thank you so much =)

      I hope all is well with you!!!

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  5. Hi Elsie, I am happy that you like my poem.

    Thanks again for letting me share your story.

    Hugs and have a lovely day ~

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    1. Thank you once again for such a beautiful poem and for treating this topic and the responses with such respect.

      Hugs back!! Be well!!

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  6. we do love Heaven or Grace, depends on what mood she is in LOL, and I love to get poetical with her in comments.

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    1. Ah, yes, Heaven or Grace....

      I never even try to get poetic in my comments - she's got me beat!! =))

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  7. That is good, I love to write but that would have been hard to do.

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    1. This was a tough topic to tackle and she did it with beauty and grace.

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  8. This is just beautiful and what a great way to look at it.

    Love,
    Meemaw

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    1. Isn't she wonderful, Meemaw!!! Her writings are always this beautiful.

      xoxoxo

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  9. That truly was beautiful.
    The best I can come up with are dirty limericks.

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    1. Me too, Al!! I had a hard enough time trying to come up with a rhyme when I did a dedication post for Pat and his evil cat!

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  10. This was beautiful. I like that the whole message is that it was penned out of love, not out of scorn.

    Also, along the same lines as Al Penwasser, you've seen our poetry, so for the sake of you AND us, we won't be asking you to let us make any of your posts into a poem. We promise.

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    1. That's what I loved too, B & B; she handled this with such, well, grace and eloquence.

      Hmmm, maybe Slim could jot a few lines for ol' Elsie...LMAO!! He'd do a fine job, at least in his mind he would.

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  11. Yep heaven can surely capture it, whether day to day or a lovey dovey, sensual filled fit. The cat can do it too and will even give a preview for you:

    Agree to disagree
    As you scratch a flea
    Then smack your head
    Oops, now someone is dead
    Things still flaunt
    As now a ghost starts to haunt
    And its naked at that
    With only a door mat
    That reads
    Scarying away your needs

    See wasn't that grand? Just popped out of the cat today in a minute or two as I can rhyme oh so great on cue.

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    1. Ah, yes, that was quite grand
      as your BS flows across my land
      Let me find my thorny flower
      to shove down your meower
      Get out of here you flea bitten cat
      and stay within the confines of your mat!!

      =PP

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    2. Oooh General Elsie that was so wicked. I'm falling in love with you all over again!!

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    3. It is my soothing tone that draws you in, isn't Anne ha ha ha!! =)

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    4. Pfft go sniff a butt
      Like your barking mutt
      And prove you're a one eye nut
      There at your hut
      Stuck in a rut
      As the cat fills his gut
      And then let something cut
      And send poo your way the size of King Tut

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    5. There you go again obsessing about poo
      all because you are jealous about the golden loo
      I'll be sitting upon that golden throne next week
      the one where you couldn't even take a leak
      so take your poo and scurry back to your mat
      before my dogs eat you up, you flea bitten cat!

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    6. Well without out proof
      You'll still be a one eyed goof
      Like a cat on a hot tin roof
      And then you'll go poof
      All will be left is the golden loo
      As they make you shoo
      Without a single movement coming due
      And look I didn't even say poo

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  12. That was beautiful. It's because you have a love worth writing gorgeous poems about. That, love, is special.

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    1. Aww, Nellie, you are so sweet! Heaven has such a way with words; I envy her word smithing talents.

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  13. Very deep emotions involved for sure. Beautiful expression of the love and pain.

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    1. She did a such a fantastic job with the subject. I was stunned!

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    1. Thanks for stopping by, King Daddy A. I agree, Heaven did a great job.

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  15. Excellently written. We need more talented people like her exposing their talents like this. Just.. great. Too well done.

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    1. Heaven is so very gifted. Reading her work is very humbling.

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  16. Thank you for the kind compliments everyone ~

    I appreciate them ~

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    1. Well deserved, Heaven, well deserved!

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  17. Oh she really is a very talented lady :) You did right with trusting her with your boundary agreement.

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    1. I agree, Jax. I'm so glad I trusted in her =)

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  18. Wow! It's amazing how one poem can completely capture the essence of your blog. Wonderfully written.

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    1. I know right! She did such a great job from beginning to end - I love it!

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  19. What a perfect poem. Powerful too.

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  20. Wow the poem is so touching a moving and yes beautifully written loved it she did a great job...........

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    1. I love it too, Jo-Anne, she took a tough topic and handled it so delicately

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  21. Wow! That was beautiful! Amazing piece of writing!

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    1. I wish I had half of Heaven's talent!!

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